The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.

The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.
The process illustrates the
water
cycle, which is the continuous movement of
water
on, above and below the surface of the Earth. We can see how works the
water
cycle,
although
it needs a lot of time to
keeps
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up
movement
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of
water
. First of all, if the weather
will be
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hot
then
ocean
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the ocean
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contributes about 80
percent
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of
total
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water
vapour in
air
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the air
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. In fact, the moisture will be condensing
water
vapour.
After
this
, could formation and rains
creates
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lakes. On high peaks form snow, which after a few time melts. Lakes and
water
of snow or precipitation
goes
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down penetrating into the ground.
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to
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all surface runoff has
way
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to
ocean
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. As can be seen from the diagram, the
water
cycle did not stop their process.
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  • evaporation
  • transpiration
  • condensation
  • precipitation
  • aquifers
  • percolation
  • surface runoff
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  • atmosphere
  • vapor
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