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The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.

The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.
Three pie charts illustrate the differences in yearly expenditure by local authorities in Some-land in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
Overall
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, most of the budget was allocated to higher education.
It is clear that
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 spending
in
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on
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slightly
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has risen slightly
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rose
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throughout the decades.
On the contrary
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, funding in
“other”
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the “other”
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 sector declined during the period.
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, the majority of
finance
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the finance
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 spent on higher education, which
is
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in 1980 amounted to 35 per
cent
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.
Although
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 after a decade it rose
for
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by
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 ten per
cent
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, in 2000 it was forty per
cent
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, which is eight of nine of the corresponding figure for 1990. In 1990, the average
of
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budget for “other” expenditure was 4 per
cent
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, which is
two thirds
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two-thirds
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 of the budget from ten years ago. After a
decade
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decade,
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 the proportion of spending on
this
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 field dropped to 75 per
cent
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evaporation
  • transpiration
  • condensation
  • precipitation
  • aquifers
  • percolation
  • surface runoff
  • replenishing
  • infiltrates
  • atmosphere
  • vapor
  • liquid
  • cycle
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