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One of the most widely debated issues nowadays is that the number of traffic congestion is growing in almost every country year by year

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One of the most widely debated issues nowadays is that the number of
traffic
 congestion is growing in almost every country year by year. Personally, I believe that
this
 kind of problem ought to be solved urgently, and
this
 essay will
further
 discuss how
traffic
 on
roads
 occurs and solutions that can be taken in order to reduce the number of
traffic
 at
community
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 and individual
level
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. One of the main reasons for the emergence of
traffic
 flows is statistics of
population
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 which is increasing every day.
Therefore
, it is not surprising that a lot of people own private cars in order to get to their work on exact time, as it is really useful to cover the miles in a short amount of time.
As a result
, it leads to
traffic
 flows on
roads
 and quarrels between furious drivers who may have serious duties related to their businesses. To tackle
this
 kind of issue, the government of each country ought to plan and construct
roads
 and highways of high quality both in new industrial centres and rural areas. Especially ways in rural fields are often really
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as well as
 terrible, and
needed
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 be improved.
Thus
, these measures may be one of the easiest and so the best ways to minimize the number of
traffic
 congestion on
roads
 and highways. Having weighed everything mentioned
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, we can come to the conclusion that these measures ought to be taken urgently in order to allow people to drive freely without any obstacles that may happen during their trips.
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