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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA (2003-2013)

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA (2003-2013)
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The bar chart demonstrates how often
people
 in
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 ate fast
food
during
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from
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 2003 to 2013. Generally, most
people
 (about 60%) ate at fast
food
 restaurants once a
week
 or once or twice a month. The percentage of
people
 who ate fast
food
 several
times
 a
week
 is about 15% to 20%,
while
 that a few
times
 a year is slightly lower, which is 15% or below.
However
, there are around 3%
Americans
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of Americans
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 enjoy fast
food
 every day. Meantime, 4%-5% of them never ate fast
food
 at all. It's noticeable that in 2003 and 2006, the percentage of
people
 who ate fast
food
 several
times
 a
week
 and once a
week
 is slightly higher than that in 2006, but it was a little lower in 2003.
However
, the number of
people
 who ate fast
food
 once or twice a month became bigger than that in 2003 and 2006, and
people
 who ate fast
food
 a few
times
 a year or never ate them maintain the same in 2006 and 2013.
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