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Employers should focus on personal qualities instead of qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree?

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In today's world, many successful companies prefer to hire
employes
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 based on their
degree
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 certificates and how many years of
experience
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 they have for that job. And I strongly believe
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 the given statement. I think there are many other qualities job seekers have, so, they should consider that too. In
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss, there are many more things
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 hiring a perfect candidate than some
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certificates
 and
experience
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. First and
the
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foremost, every multinational or local company wants to invest in
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employes
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employees
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, who have tons of
work
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experience
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 or have
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a degree
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degree
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 from
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 universities. They are not wrong to do so. And, a reputed college or university
degree
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 holder would be beneficial for their company as they learn so many things or have
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 understanding of concepts required for respective
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work
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. But, on
ther
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the
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, a mere page of
cerificate
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certificate
 can not define a person.
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, there are many
employes
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employees
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, who do not
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possess
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qualification
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qualifications
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 or do not have relevant
work
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experience
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, but, they
work
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 hard and gain their position in
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big companies.
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, it is far more important to
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 a candidate for
work
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, who is willing to put his best efforts and do his part with enthusiasm. So, it is significant to employ someone with better personal
signifigance
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significance
 rather than some page of
degree
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.
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, it is important for any
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work place
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, to employ candidates, who can
work
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with
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co-ordination
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 with each other and tackle any situation easily. To recapitulate,
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 hiring, it is important to hire highly educated
personals
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, but, employers must focus on the qualities of individuals as well.
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