The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
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This
diagram looks at the average amount of hours per week spent by men and women doing the housework and carrying the children. The given illustration gives three categories depending on the quantity
of kids.
If we look at the data only for women, with the increasing number of children, the upward trend Change the quantifier
number
of
working hours can be seen. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, wives carrying more than three children spend twice as much time
doing unpaid work compared to those, who have the
only Correct article usage
apply
child
.
On the other side, for Correct pronoun usage
one child
men
the Add a comma
,men
time
spent on the
housework insignificantly depends on the number of kids. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, the amount of time
even slightly decreases for families with more than five members, in contrast
to the smaller ones.
To summarize, the provided line graph highlights that married women spend much more of their time
on the occupation related to the house and families, compare to their husbands.Submitted by li_istomina on
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