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Some people think that school and government should take responsibility to transport children to school. While some people think that parents should get children to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there is a debate about who should be responsible
to take
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children
 to
school
. Some people believe governments should take the responsibility of commuting students to
school
,
while
 opponents argue that
children
 should be safeguarded by
parents
 when they are going to
school
. In
this
 essay, I would like to analyze the two statements above and give my own opinion that
school
 is supposed to be the sector that transports students to
school
. On
one
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 hand, there are several reasons why some people insist that schools should take
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responsibility. First of all,
school
 buses are of higher quality compared with common personal vehicles, and will decrease the rate of injury when there is an accident.
Accordingly
,
school
 buses are considered to be able to better secure students’ safety.
Besides
, the
school
 bus, as a form of public transportation, has the potential to release (the 去掉) traffic stress, particularly during rush hours.
For example
, traffic jam has become a significant trend in big cities
due to
 the increasing number of private car usage.
According to
 the study conducted by Public Transport Association in the U.S., the average time spent
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traffic jam each year for a person is 400 hours.
Therefore
, Using
school
 buses could be an efficient way to cope with
this
 issue.
On the other hand
, the opponents argue that
parents
 should not be replaced by others when it comes to getting
children
 to
school
. One of the considerations could be that they believe
parents
 can better discipline their
children
 than
school
.
For instance
, during my student days, there were often classmates who arrived late or even skipped
school
 entirely.
However
, their
parents
 were completely unaware of it.
Therefore
, the lack of supervision from
parents
 towards their
children
 can lead to a decline in
there
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 academic performance and eventually dropping out.
Moreover
, they may hope to have more liberty in
daily
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their daily
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 routine,
in other words
, they can decide their own time to take
children
 to
school
.
While
 both sides make sense, after considering public transportation,
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 safety factor mentioned above, I believe that
school
 can be a better choice in terms of taking
children
 to
school
.
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task response
Ensure that your essay directly addresses the given topic by discussing both views and providing your opinion. Pay attention to the structure of your argument and ensure that your discussion is well-developed.
coherence and cohesion
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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