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You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make.

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Adriana Fonseca, I currently hold an account at Bank of America and yesterday I received my bill related to my credit card, I need your help to solve the problem that I am facing with a lot of charges.
Firstly
, The
last
 time I used my credit card was at the fair park, in the summer, to be specifically on Saturday the 17th, on that day I brought a pink jacket at the Intinerant bus store,and I paid $50.00 dollars.
Nevertheless
, I am not understanding why I was charged a supermarket bill on Monday the 18th in the morning with a total of $100 hundred dollars.
Moreover
, I know that your bank is trustworthy, but someone needs to solve that mistake, I was not responsible for that amount on my credit card, I have witnessed that I have been at home from Saturday until Sunday.
Nevertheless
, I hope you find a solution to take out that terrible mistake from my statement. I am extremely excited to know your return from my email or cellphone that you already have saved in my contacts information. Yours Sincerely, Adriana Fonseca
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