The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar charts illustrate the future choices of UK graduate and postgraduate

students

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who did not choose to be full-time workers in 2008.

Overall

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, both charts present similar traits that

further

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studying is the top choice.

In contrast

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, the least of

students

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joined voluntary work. The number of

students

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who picked part-time work ranked behind

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studying, but more than the number of unemployed. Detailly speaking, in the group of graduate

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, around 30,000

students

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were willing to keep studying. Meanwhile, the number of people who picked part-time jobs and did not get employed are 17,735 and 16,235 respectively.

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, only 3500

students

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chose to serve voluntary work.

On the other hand

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, there are 2,725 postgraduate

students

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continuing to stay in the school for

further

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study. At the same time, there are 2,535 new part-time workers.

However

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, there are 1,625 postgraduate

students

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unemployed.

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, the least amount of people who chose to be a voluntary worker which is 345.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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4 paragraphs

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Topic Vocabulary:

academic pursuit
temporary employment
voluntary work
further studies
part-time work
full-time employment
data representation
statistical comparison
post-educational paths
job market
unemployment rate
career advancement
skill development
lifelong learning
employment sector
vocational training
economic trends
workforce participation
career aspirations
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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In some cities, public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people prefer to go to health clubs and gyms for health care, some say the walking and climbing stairs are more effective. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.

Some argue that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should perform in the place where they accomplished their training, while others think that they should be allowed to work freely where they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

should the governments make decisions about peoples lifestyle , or should people make their own decisions?What is your Opinion?

Some people think that the increase in international travel has a negative impact on the environment and should be restricted. To what extent you agree or disagree?