The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar charts illustrate the future choices of UK graduate and postgraduate
students
who did not choose to be full-time workers in 2008.
Overall
, both charts present similar traits that further
studying is the top choice. In contrast
, the least of students
joined voluntary work. The number of students
who picked part-time work ranked behind further
studying, but more than the number of unemployed.
Detailly speaking, in the group of graduate students
, around 30,000 students
were willing to keep studying. Meanwhile, the number of people who picked part-time jobs and did not get employed are 17,735 and 16,235 respectively. Furthermore
, only 3500 students
chose to serve voluntary work.
On the other hand
, there are 2,725 postgraduate students
continuing to stay in the school for further
study. At the same time, there are 2,535 new part-time workers.However
, there are 1,625 postgraduate students
unemployed. Finally
, the least amount of people who chose to be a voluntary worker which is 345.Submitted by xiaol8616 on
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