The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar charts illustrate the future choices of UK graduate and postgraduate

students

who did not choose to be full-time workers in 2008.

Overall

, both charts present similar traits that

further

studying is the top choice.

In contrast

, the least of

students

joined voluntary work. The number of

students

who picked part-time work ranked behind

further

studying, but more than the number of unemployed. Detailly speaking, in the group of graduate

students

, around 30,000

students

were willing to keep studying. Meanwhile, the number of people who picked part-time jobs and did not get employed are 17,735 and 16,235 respectively.

Furthermore

, only 3500

students

chose to serve voluntary work.

On the other hand

, there are 2,725 postgraduate

students

continuing to stay in the school for

further

study. At the same time, there are 2,535 new part-time workers.

However

, there are 1,625 postgraduate

students

unemployed.

Finally

, the least amount of people who chose to be a voluntary worker which is 345.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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academic pursuit
temporary employment
voluntary work
further studies
part-time work
full-time employment
data representation
statistical comparison
post-educational paths
job market
unemployment rate
career advancement
skill development
lifelong learning
employment sector
vocational training
economic trends
workforce participation
career aspirations
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