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nowadays, plastic money replacements such as credit card or debit card are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and include your own opinion.

#plastic #money #replacements #credit #card #debit #banknotes #coins
Throughout history, humans have used many items as a
mean
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 to conduct their trading. After many changes
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 we have reached to
a Plastic
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Plastic cards
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cards
such
 as debit and credit
cards
. In
this
 essay , I will examine the benefits and downwards of
this
 mean compared to normal banknotes. to Start with, bank
cards
 are much
more
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easier and simpler to
use
 than bank
notes
 in terms of practicality. We
dont
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don't
 have to
warry
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worry
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 about
carring
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carrying
caring
 any
amout
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amount
 of cash to complete our
purcheses
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purchases
;more importantly,
its
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it's
it is
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 safer and
trustworthy
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more trustworthy
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 as all transactions are being digitalized and recorded.
while
 in cash transactions, we have to worry about many things including the
legitimasy
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legitimacy
 of coins or banknotes that are being used many
fraudster
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 might
use
 fake
notes
 that have no value and
its
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it's
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 hard to check and trace every transaction.
Also
, in terms of high inflation scenario where currencies
loses
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its
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their
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 value to conduct a small
transaction
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 we need to
use
 a huge amount of
notes
 to complete one transaction in some cases people might need to rent a car to carry. to be fair, there are
also
 downsides
for
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to
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 using digital
notes
. Fake advertisements and websites are all over the internet and to be honest their techniques are advancing and
its
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it's
it is
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 hard for a
lay man
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layman
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 to
spote
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spot
spots
 easily.
While
 sharing your card number to purchase a scammed deal , you might be risking the entire amount that you have in your bank account
unkownly
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unknown
unknowingly
. on the
otherhand
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other hand
, purchasing online with cash payment on delivery can save you from kind of scam techniques.
to conclude
, with every
developments
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development
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 there are negative sides and debit or credit
cards
 are no special.
Although
 these
cards
 are
feascilbe
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feasible
 to
use
 and more
convenience
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,
but
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 we have to be extra
carreful
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careful
 about our usage not to fall for any kind of scams.
conversly
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Conversely
, banknotes are not practical for most
modern age
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 transactions and they are losing their position as
meduim
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media
.
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easy
eassy
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easy
 to carry , usage , practical fraudsters are advancing in
there
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their
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 techniques
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