Write a letter to a local authority by requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area. -Mention about the current sports facilities available -What kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced? -How would the new sports facilities be a help for the people in your age group?

Dear sir, I am writing on behalf of the Burnaby residents, where one of the finest playgrounds of the city is situated.I am writing in regards to improve the current sports facility and add some new sports facility here.
To begin
with, in Burnaby ,
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playground
there is only a running
track
is
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available which is even in bad condition as there is not enough infrastructure to take care of it.Only running
track
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become extremely crowded during the weekend and especially
on
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the evening.
This
area is habitant by teenagers, adults
as well as
seniors who spend most of their time in
this
park. If we get a baseball for teenagers, a tennis and badminton court for the adult
as well as
repairing the running
track
will be
benefited
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for us. Baseball will help adolescents to spend their time in a game. Adults can play and practise badminton and tennis on the court.
As a result
, they will be eligible to join the national game competition.If they win they will bring pride to our city. Seniors citizen can keep their bodies fit by walking on the
track
. I believe you will take prompt steps to keep our request and give us our desired sports facilities. Yours faithfully
Submitted by AAk on

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