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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs below compare activities undertaken by
graduates
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 and postgraduates who were in full-time employment in the UK in the year 2008. Generally, there was a huge difference between the two categories. But, most
graduates
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 and postgraduates engaged in
further
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 studies with
graduates
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 having the biggest numbers,
this
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 was followed by part-time
work
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.
However
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, a small number of the
graduates
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also
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 participated in voluntary
work
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.
First,
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it is depicted that 29,665
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students who left college continued studying to extend
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their knowledge.
This
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 was followed by 17, 735 school leavers applying for part-time jobs. Interestingly, a large number remained unemployed (15,235), and a few decided to do voluntary roles (3,500).
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, postgraduate students enrolling in higher education were not as high as
graduates
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, with only 2,720.
Furthermore
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, those in part-time employment and unpaid
work
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 were only 2,535 and 345 respectively. Postgraduates who did not
work
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 accounted for 1,625 in that year.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pursuit
  • temporary employment
  • voluntary work
  • further studies
  • part-time work
  • full-time employment
  • data representation
  • statistical comparison
  • post-educational paths
  • job market
  • unemployment rate
  • career advancement
  • skill development
  • lifelong learning
  • employment sector
  • vocational training
  • economic trends
  • workforce participation
  • career aspirations
  • higher education
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