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You recently moved house and you used a removal Company to help you move your belongings. However, some of your things were damaged in the move. Write a letter to the manager of the removal company. In your letter, •Give details of the move •Describe the damage • Say what you would like the manager to do.

#house #company #move #belongings #manager #•give #•describe #damage
Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction regarding your service. Unfortunately, during the house
moving
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, some of my properties were damaged.
Firstly
, I just moved to one of
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an apartment
the apartment
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apartment
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apartments
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 near the city
center
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centre
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 in Santonio
this
 week and sought
for
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apply
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a trusted removal company.
Then
, I saw on the internet about your pleasant services and decided to
booked
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 your company service for my movement on June 22nd. Allow me to explain
on
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the
damage
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damaged
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 items, it is a red gaming chair with
blue
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a blue
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 strip on its handle, before the moving the height adjustment
were
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was
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 still working.
However
, the handle is broken and it is not moving anymore.
In addition
, there is
also
 a crack
on
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in
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 my glass cupboard, which I use to put my plates. I hope you can do
further
 investigation about
this
 matter.
Moreover
, I would like to file an insurance claim for my items, as I have purchased the insurance card.
Furthermore
, based on your regulators regarding
this
 issue. If I understand correctly, your company will cover the damage if it’s caused by
the
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service errors. I kindly hope you can resolve
this
 problem promptly and I am looking forward to your reply . Yours Sincerely, Jun
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Contractions

Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.

In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.

In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.

Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.

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