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The two maps show changes to the town center between 1836 and today.

The two maps show changes to the town center between 1836 and today.
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The pair of maps present the development of the town
center
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centre
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 from 1836 to today. In general, there was a significant change
of
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in
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 landscape from 1836 to
present
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the present
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for instance
 more business areas and more public facilities.
A half
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Half
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 of
forest
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the forest
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 was deforested and replaced by the two main public facilities namely
the
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apply
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Highway 6 and a school. On the west side, In 1836, a market and inn which were located along
the
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North St
was
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 removed to make way for the development of the offices.
In addition
, the small business
area
 was
also
 built on the opposite side of South St by changing the residential
area
. A large Hotel located between River
ave
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 and Forest was demolished. The town
center
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centre
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 went from having two inn complexes to having two apartments which are erected
on
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in
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 the residential
area
. Looking to the east, the green
area
 sees the most change at the moment. The forest
in
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1836 was replaced by a school in the top right corner of the
area
.
Furthermore
, Highway 6 was
also
 constructed as part of the deforestation
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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