The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014

The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014
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The bar chart gives data about the percentage of
woman
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women
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without employment in four nations in the UK from 2013 and 2014.
Overall
, there was a slight decrease in the rate of
unemployment
in most of the countries, except in Scotland.
Additionally
, England was the nation with the highest level of
unemployment
in
woman
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women
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. As is seen in the graph, in England in 2013 the rate of
unemployment
reached a peak at 6.8% and was the highest among the other categories,
however
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in the next
year
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it decreased slightly
by
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0.3% to 6.5%.
Whereas
, Scotland had the opposite trend and increased rapidly from 6.1% to 6.7% in the same period and was the most crowded nation in terms of female
unemployment
.
Reganding
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Regarding
to the other two nations, Wales and Nothern Ireland almost shared the same rate in 2013 at 5.4% and 5.6% respectively.
Nevertheless
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in 2014 exactly one in twenty of the woman in Wales did not have employment,
while
only 4.6% of them did not have
a
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work in
Nothern
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Northern
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Ireland.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
this
nation had the lowest level of female
unemployment
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rate
  • temporal trends
  • regional variations
  • economic policies
  • industry growth/decline
  • educational opportunities
  • social implications
  • gender equality
  • workforce participation
  • family income
  • employment opportunities
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