The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
The provided line graph illustrates the rate of holidaymakers who visited four attractions namely
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Gallery, Pavilion, Pier and Festival in Brighton between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, the most crowded attraction was Pavilion in most of the given period,
whereas
the Pier was the least popular among the visitors. As is seen in the graph, in 1980 the percentage for Pier was only 10% and was the lowest across the four attractions and
this
figure fluctuated slightly until 2000, before increasing rapidly to almost 22% in 2010. Meanwhile, the rate for art Gallery started above 20% in 1980 and in the following 5 years reached a peak at 38%,
however
in 1990 decreased dramatically to 20%.
Then
in the next 20 years reached a low
at
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nearly 8% in 2010. Regarding Pavilion, in 1980 roughly one in fourth of
tourist
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tourists
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visited it,
nevertheless
in 1995 increased
abruptally
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abruptly
to 48%,
then
despite
of
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decreasing steadily in the remained period it was the most visited place.
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the percentage for the Festival
,
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did not
experienced
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significant changes and remained stable between 1985 to 2010 at 25%.
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