The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three period and whether they were studying full-time and part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain  in three period and whether they were studying full-time and part-time.
The bar graph depicts the details about the
number
of
males
and females in
Britian
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Britain
who were
persuing
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pursuing
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a
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higher
education
full
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full-time
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time
and
part
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part-time
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time
during a
three year
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three-year
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period from 1970 to 1990. Throughout the period from 1970 to 1990, more
number
of
males
and females
have
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opted for part-
time
education
instead
of full-
time
. In 1970, most of the
males
have done their higher
education
part-
time
, but
this
has
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dropped in 1980 and
rised
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rose
raised
rise
again in 1990.
However
, there has
a
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been a gradual rise in the
number
of
males
who have opted for
full
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full-time
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time
education
from 1970 to 1990. An upward trend in the
number
of
woman
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women
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can be observed who have taken up
further
studies
part-
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part-time
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time
from 1970 which has reached the highest in 1990 beating the
number
of men in part-
time
education
. A similar increase in the
number
of female students has been noticed in
full
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time
higher studies.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, males, education, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.
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