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Nuclear power is far too dangerous. Therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead on developing alternative sources of energy such as hydroelectric power, wind power, and solar energy. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer

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It is more often, argued that atomic
power
 or nuclear fission
power
 plants conserve a lot of
resources
 on the earth.
Whereas
 other
resources
 are equally beneficial for the growth of the planet like wind
energy
as well as
 solar efficiency similar to hydroelectric
energy
. I totally agree with the notion discussed in the relevant paragraphs. first of all arguments, the strongest one to prove my view is nuclear fission spirit has a lot of capability which consists of destroying the half universe.
this
 is to say that
this
 atomic efficiency consists of highly radioactive electric waves which are not healthy for human bodies. A good example of a Hollywood movie written by director mr Nolan
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said that a fission vitality plant cost requires billions of dollars used for research to make a national bomb
also
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 years of hard work included by advanced scientists.
Besides
this
, it is
also
 true that government need to focus into develop water conservation efficiency like dam and lakes. the other reason to prove my point is nuclear
power
 requires a lot of research to prove because nuclear is a
power
 combination of
resources
 which
basically
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 found in
earth's
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 troposphere. Nuclear
energy
 damages lives for ages
for example
 an atomic bomb was deployed in Hiroshima in Japan took lives and leave behind a cause of death forever.
In addition
, spending on a dangerous chemical reaction
instead
investment
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for
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in
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 making windmills which generates a thousand
of
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watts of electricity.
Moreover
, some people counterclaim the mentioned support. the foremost argument they do is to ban the nuclear
power
energy
 plant.
Also
, increase the education of small projects for undeveloped cities. In conclusion, it can be said that country with a nuclear
power
 support is called a developed and rich state forum. Despite that increasing the investment in other
resources
 will make the country more powerful, resource full and beneficial in all aspects. The government should look into that matter.
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