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The two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison wherever relevant.

The two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison wherever relevant.
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The maps represent information
of
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on
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road
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the road
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 system in
City
 Hospital and how it changed from 2007 to 2010. The main part with
city
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the city
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 hospital itself remained the same but the rest of the map had significant changes. To start with, in 2007 there was
one
 straight
road
 which
is
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called hospital
road
 and in 2010 two roundabout crossroads were added to it.
One
 of them is
on
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at
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 the intersection with
city
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the city
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road
 and another
one
 with
ring
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the ring
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road
.
In addition
 to that, bus stops used to stand
at
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on
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 both sides of
this
road
,
the
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they
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 have been replaced with
bus
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a bus
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 station on the left side and
staff
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a staff
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 car park on the right
one
. There are
to
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two
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 entrances to the bus station they are located on both roundabouts. With
renovation
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the renovation
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 of the
city
 new car park for
public
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the public
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have
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has
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 been built next to the ring
road
 on the east. The hospital
city
 experienced some changes in the access
of
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to
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 roads. The area with
hospital
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the hospital
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road
 changed a lot and new facilities have been added, but the ring
road
 remained the same only with public car park have been built.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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