The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram demonstrates how
electricity
is produced in a hydroelectric
power
station
in
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during
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the
day
and at
night
.
The first step is
to make sure
water
in
river
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the river
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flow
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flows
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into the high-level reservoir which is blocked by a dam.
Then
water
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the water
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flows to the
power
station
. There some reversible turbines are set up and they are connected to a generator, which is the core equipment to generate
electricity
.
Then
the generator turns the
water
power
into
electricity
and it is conveyed by the powerlines to the national grid. The generating process of
electricity
differs in the
day
and at
night
. In the
day
, the
water
naturally flows into the
power
station
while
it is pumped back at
night
instead
. Meanwhile, during the
day
, the
water
which
go
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goes
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through the
power
station
flow
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flows
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into the low-level reservoir directly, but it is pumped back into the high-level reservoir at
night
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, station, day, night, water with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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