The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram demonstrates how
electricity
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is produced in a hydroelectric
power
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station
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in
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the
day
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and at
night
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.
The first step is
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to make sure
water
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in
river
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the river
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flow
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flows
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into the high-level reservoir which is blocked by a dam.
Then
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water
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the water
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flows to the
power
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station
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. There some reversible turbines are set up and they are connected to a generator, which is the core equipment to generate
electricity
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.
Then
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the generator turns the
water
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power
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into
electricity
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and it is conveyed by the powerlines to the national grid. The generating process of
electricity
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differs in the
day
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and at
night
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. In the
day
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, the
water
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naturally flows into the
power
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station
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while
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it is pumped back at
night
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instead
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. Meanwhile, during the
day
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, the
water
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which
go
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through the
power
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station
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flow
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flows
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into the low-level reservoir directly, but it is pumped back into the high-level reservoir at
night
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, station, day, night, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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