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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Data for
underground
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the underground
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 railway system for 6 cities
has
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have
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 been tabulated in the given table.
Overall
, Tokyo receives the
higest
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highest
passengers
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number of passengers
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 per year which is 1927
million
 and the least is in Kyoto which is 45
million
. The first underground railway was established in London in 1863 which covered a
distance
 of 394km,
this
 is the longest journey amongst all the cities mentioned in the table. Following London
,
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 was Paris, where the metro was installed in
the
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1900 covering an
overall
distance
 of 199km and recording the second
higest
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highest
passengers
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number of passengers
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 which
is
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are
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 1191
million
 after Tokyo whose tram was opened to
public
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the public
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 in 1927. Washington DC introduced its train in 1976 which covered a length of 126km and received 144
million
passengers
 every
365-days
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365 days
. Kyoto established its underground rail transport system in 1981 which covers 11km, which is the least
distance
 amongst all the cities mentioned.
Moreover
, it receives the least number of
passengers
 per year
that
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which
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 is 45
million
.
Lastly
, the latest rail system introduced was in 2001, which covered a
distance
 of 28km receiving 50
million
passengers
 yearly.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, million, distance, km with synonyms.
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