You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear John
Hope
this
letter finds you in radiant health and best of spirits. I am writing this
letter to let you know that I am coming to your homeland, Australia, to pursue my higher studies. I know that you must be delighted to know
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hear
this
news.
I have got
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been
admission
into Monash University and my session is starting in January 2021. I have chosen tourism subject as you know I am a wanderlust person. Though the course is quite expensive Replace the word
admitted
yet
I am hopeful that I Correct word choice
apply
would
get ample opportunities after the completion of the course.
To assist in covering the cost of study, I am aiming to do a part-time job. I know that you have a wide social circle since you Wrong verb form
will
are
living in Melbourne for the past 12 years. I was wondering if you could ask your friends or work colleagues to see if anyone wants a house cleaner, cook, or nanny for their children. I am willing to do any part-time job. I know I am bothering you but I do not anyone in Australia apart from you. I would be grateful if you could help me with Wrong verb form
have been
this
.
I look forward to seeing you soon. Take care and stay fine.
Thank you
Anmol MalikSubmitted by mangathm on
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task response
Provide more specific details about the study plans and reasons for choosing a part-time job. This will make the response more complete and relevant to the task.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and is connected logically to the following paragraph. Add more linking words and phrases to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Expand the range of vocabulary used and consider using more varied and precise language to convey meaning effectively.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and use a variety of grammatical structures to accurately convey meaning. Check for subject-verb agreement and use of verb tenses.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite