In many countries around the world , rural people are moving to cities,so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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migration of people from metropolitans to urban areas has increased the rural population.which I personally believe can be both positive and negative phenomenon so
this
essay will address the reasons in detail. On one side of the argument , there is a gloomy aspect.
For instance
, a lack of manpower in the countryside can reduce vegetables and other food products because there is not a farmer to do planting and irrigation, so can not only destroy organic fruits but
also
there won't be any available cuisine for animals. On the other ,hand it can be useful changes ,especially for students.
due to
the access to educational perks,
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furthermore
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they can learn from highly-educated teachers and have more job opportunities so they can leave on welfare.transportation will be easier for them ,they can use the metro , taxi ,bus or even snap. Not only more facilities but
also
entertainment venues for spending their leisure time.
To sum up
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although
travelling from agricultural areas to cities has soared , in my point of
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this
event has both merits and demerits
however
the benefits can outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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