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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened and that you want your money back.

#restaurant #manager #money
To the Manager, I want to inform you that Sunday night at 9p.m, I ate at your restaurant with my family and friends. We were there to celebrate my son's birthday. But, I have experienced that your staff numbers were not polite with children, because workers were behaving rudely and said that quit please,
whereas
 they were talking with each other.
Apart from
this
, they served the main course first and
then
 snacks, which did not make sense.
Moreover
, I want to tell you that the food quality was
also
 cheap compared to the price, I paid for the restaurant.
Last
 but not least, I
also
 want to inform you that please keep your washroom clean and neat. I hope that you will understand my issue and refund me all amount, which was two hundred dollars because your staff members destroyed my party.
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