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The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts provide the
perfomance
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performance
 related to
the
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punctuality. The first chart looks at the percentage of actual and target of buses
ariving
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arriving
 on
time
,
while
 the second one illustrates the number of complaints of the passengers per one
thousant
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thousand
thousands
 of journeys, all the information presents the situation from 1999 to 2003. The provided illustration reveals that in every year
exept
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except
 2003 the actual
time
 was lower
then
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 the target. At the same
time
, the biggest gap between these categories was in
the
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2000 and the difference was 4%,
whereas
 in other cases the delta was 1% or less. An interesting situation can be seen
at
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 the second picture.
Thus
, the
nuber
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number
 of complaints was minimal
at
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in
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 1999,
than
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then
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 had a peak
at
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in
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 2000 and slightly decreased in 2001.
Althow
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Although
 from 2001 to 2003 the upward trend can be seen. In conclusion, it can be observed that there is no year in which predicted arriving on
time
 would be the same
to
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 that in reality.
Also
, the number of passengers who wants to complain mainly increases through the years and
not
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are not
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 clearly bonded with
a buses
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buses
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 arriving at the right
time
.
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