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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives

#aim #science #people’s #lives
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There is no denying the fact that
science
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believe
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to
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 importance
aim
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develop
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people
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 lives.
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 it is a commonly held belief that a crucial target of
science
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 must be to advance the
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, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that many
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science
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have
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value
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aim
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 and awareness should be
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be enhance
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lifestyle
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 of many different
people
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, it advance
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 of individuals.
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due to
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 looking for
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 to improve our lives.
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,
science
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theory
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engaged
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 to consider, the
aim
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 is essential to individuals that could
be
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improve
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 they can provide
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 and knowledge to
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this
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 of lifestyle for many
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. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I believe that we should be looking for what the sciences talk
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aim
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exceptionally
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 effective in our lives.
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, they are helping
population
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on
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community
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 not just that they advanced and developing countries as
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a population
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population
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populations
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 have many
issue
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creating
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 awareness.
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  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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