The graphs compare the number of deaths caused by six diseases in Someland in 1990 with the amount of research funding allocated to each of those diseases.
The graphs show the number of people's
deasths
caused by six diseases in Someland in 1990 Correct your spelling
deaths
death
as well as
the amount of money spent on medical experimentation of
those illnesses.
Change preposition
for
Overall
, it is apparent that TB had been the most dangerous illness. However
, the financial aid for its exploration was the lowest.
At the outset, in 1990, Someland people mostly had been taken suffer
from Tuberculosis, which caused about 1.8 Wrong verb form
suffered
millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
of
people's death. Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, death accidents had been noted for the
other kinds of diseases Correct article usage
apply
such
as,
Aids, Leprosy, Tropical Diseases, Diarrhoea, Remove the comma
apply
Malaria
(just between 0.1-0.5 Correct word choice
and Malaria
millions
).
Change to singular
million
Furthermore
, the funding support for medical
search had been dedicated to Aids, noticeably, with 180 Add an article
the medical
millions
and it is thrice more than Change to singular
million
expense
Add an article
the expense
which
paid for Correct pronoun usage
apply
analysis
of Correct article usage
the analysis
Diarrhoe
(60 Correct your spelling
Diarrhoea
millions
) and Malaria (50 Change to singular
million
millions
).Change to singular
million
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