The pie chart shows change sin 4 employment sector in two towns.

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The given pie charts represent the variations for 3 employment sectors in two Towns A and B over 4 decades.

Initially

, for Town A, in 1960 the sector in most demand has been manufacturing which has dropped to almost 50 per cent over 4 decades and a similar trend in sales can be observed.

On the other hand

, the field of services has doubled becoming the most popular sector in 2010. In Town B, the manufacturing industry dropped in the

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period by a few per cent.

However

, the field of services has boomed over time rising by more than 50 per cent. A small rise can be seen in

sales

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the sales

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sector. In conclusion, both

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Towns A and B have seen a drastic rise in the service industry and a dip in the manufacturing field with some fluctuations in the sales industry in less than half a century.

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