The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
This
table depicts the workforce number
who work in factories
in two countries; England and Wales around 50 years
. It is clear from the graph that the ratio of employees has decreased significantly through the period and on the opposite side the manufacturing number
has spread in both nations.
According to
what is shown, in the first 30 years
, in 1851 the total of employees has 477,100 inculding
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including
it
3 287,100 male and 190 female. Ten Correct pronoun usage
apply
years
later two factories
were bulit
more which almost three hundred thousand men and women. In 1871 the male employees Correct your spelling
built
was
80,123 and the female worker Change the verb form
were
they
represent three over four from proportion.
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apply
The
Change preposition
In the
last
30 years
, in 1881 the number
of factories
has soured rocketly
by 101 compared with Correct your spelling
rocket
rockets
rocketry
last
ten Correct article usage
the last
years
. And in 1891 the total of emplyees
are 105 and 65 men and 40 women. Correct your spelling
employees
The
second year of 1900 the numbered of Change preposition
In the
factories
has decrease
slightly by 25 Change the verb form
decreased
as a result
the total of
workforce has drop until it reached Change preposition
apply
to
61. Change preposition
apply
To sum up
, we could say that the male
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number of male
empolyess
is much more than the Correct your spelling
employees
employee
number
of female employess´expect
in 1861.Correct your spelling
employees expect
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