The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
This
table depicts the workforce
number
who work in
factories
in two countries; England and Wales around 50
years
. It is clear from the graph that the ratio of employees has decreased significantly through the period and on the opposite side the manufacturing
number
has spread in both nations.
According to
what is shown, in the first 30
years
, in 1851 the total of employees has 477,100
inculding
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including
it
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3 287,100 male and 190 female. Ten
years
later two
factories
were
bulit
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built
more which almost three hundred thousand men and women. In 1871 the male employees
was
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80,123 and the female worker
they
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represent three over four from proportion.
The
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last
30
years
, in 1881 the
number
of
factories
has soured
rocketly
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rocket
rockets
rocketry
by 101 compared with
last
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ten
years
. And in 1891 the total of
emplyees
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employees
are 105 and 65 men and 40 women.
The
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second year of 1900 the numbered of
factories
has
decrease
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slightly by 25
as a result
the total
of
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workforce has drop until it reached
to
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61.
To sum up
, we could say that the
male
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number of male
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empolyess
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employees
employee
is much more than the
number
of female
employess´expect
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employees expect
in 1861.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, factories, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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