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The bar chart shows the percentage of international students enrolled in British universities in two years, 1990 and 2014.

The bar chart shows the percentage of international students enrolled in British universities in two years, 1990 and 2014.
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The diagram displays the proportions of foreign
students
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 enrolled in 10 different colleges in British between 1990 and 2014.
Overall
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, the proportion of foreign
students
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 enrolled in Brighton was the highest.
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, Most of the trends of foreign
students
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 enrolled rose, except that of those in Liverpool remained and that of those in Cardiff decreased. In 2009, the percentage of
students
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 coming from other countries enrolled in Brighton was the most, with around 12%. Meanwhile, the percentages of those enrolled in Liverpool and Birmingham had the same figure, with almost 8%.
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, that of those enrolled in Huddersfield was less in 2019, with 1%. In 2014, the percentage of international
students
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 enrolled in Birmingham saw an increase, of nearly 4%. That of those enrolled in Manchester increased to 8%, the same as that of those enrolled in Liverpool in 2014. Those of those enrolled in Glasgow, Edinburgh, and Bristol grew to 6%,
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, that of those enrolled in Cardiff fell to 1% in 2014.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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