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More and more people are using the internet to contact existing friends and even make new friends. Some people are of the opinion that this has strengthened relationships between existing friends, whilst others think the opposite is true. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #internet #contact #friends #relationships #whilst
Through the
internet
 , all our world
are
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is
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 connected together in the present time . some people believe that by using the
internet
 we can keep in
touch
 and get new contact and it is a make strong our connection.
Although
 some of them believe vice versa , I describe both views
further
 and show my point of view.
To begin
 with, the
internet
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 is the best way to keep in
touch
 with anyone . nowadays
a
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the
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 huge development of social media we can get a wide range of connections. Without the use of the
Internet
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,Internet
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 people can not be in
touch
 after a separate life-way thorugh.
for instance
 , Using
the
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apply
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online ways we can get their update
also
 keep in
touch
 .
In addition
, the use of
an
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apply
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online services for
same
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the same
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 type of
person
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personal
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 connection
are
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is
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 increasing and at some
point
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,point
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 it give a good impact on life and people can communicate with deep emotions . Another side , online
relationships
 are not good compared to physical bonding . online
relationships
 are just called bonding , it can be vulnerable . like , anybody can show anything on the
internet
 platform at that time
person
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people
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 from another side believe that it could be harmful to them .
Moreover
 , online
relationships
is
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are
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 not put a good impact on any
person
's life . In conclusion ,
to make
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making
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 friends or get contact using
Internet
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the Internet
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 is a good way for every
person
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person's
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relationship
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relationships
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. In my opinion , using the
internet
we
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apply
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create strong bonding and it is a good path to
relationships
. some negative impacts are there but they should be negligible .
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