Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believes that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A section of society

believe

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that having

the

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a

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university degree is the best way to become successful

whereas

there are

others

think

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who think

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that it is more

benefical

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beneficial

of getting a

job

after

graduate

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graduation

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. From my perspective, it is more

benefits

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benefit

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to deciding to have a

job

.

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essay will

disuss

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discuss

both advantages and disadvantages of

this

point of view. On the one hand,

it is clear that

getting a

job

will

helps

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help

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us to have more experience and soft skills. It

is

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apply

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also

have more opportunity to gain

successful

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success

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through your productivity and agility.

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, one of my

friend

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friends

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just applied as an intern but was directly accepted as a

full time

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full-time

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employee by his boss because of his flexible and soft sill from his previous working times at

others

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other

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companies in the past.

On the other hand

, it is vital to understand

that

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why some

others

think having higher education is more advantageous because education is the fastest way to

successful

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be successful

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. Learning has

been lists

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been listed

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to

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as

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one of the most important things in life so

high

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a high

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degree shows how much intelligent they are. A study

of

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at

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Cambridge

university

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University

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,

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, it

is find

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out that more than half of popular companies will

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be more

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more

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apply

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accepted

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accept

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who

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those who

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had high

graduate

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graduates

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than

others

. In conclusion, even though people have different opinions, I believe that

have

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having

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higher education will be better than getting a

job

after

graduate

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graduation

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.