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Scientists and the news media are presenting ever more evidence of climate change. Governmnets cannot be expected to solve this problem. It is the responsibility of individuals to change their lifestyle to prevent further damage.

#scientists #news #media #evidence #climate #change #governmnets #responsibility #individuals #lifestyle #damage
Nowadays,the Earth suffering from some environmental issues
such
 as air pollution,contamination and
likewise
greenhouse
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 effect.
Thus
, some of these problems
such
 as greenhouse gases, cause
to
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climate
change
.Scientists and news media
are
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offers
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offer
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 ever more evidence of
climate
changes
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change
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 and governments cannot be expected to solve
this
 problem. First and foremost, Some people believe that
,
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apply
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 the best method
of
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apply
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to prevent
further
 damage is the responsibility of individuals to
change
 their lifestyle.My thoughts
exactly
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 like that because in my point of view, It does not matter the government what
do
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does
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, every time there will
some
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be some
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 humans which
is
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are
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 damage
to
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the surrounding.
For
this
 reason, each individual must find a new way and apply these methods in their lives to protect the environment for future generations.
For instance
: people have to use less
from
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coal,petrol and fuel in factories, because when peat,
coal
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and coal
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burned
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are burned
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,
they
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it
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 spread to
the
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apply
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poisonous substances
such
 as Sulfur trioxide and Nitrogen dioxide,these two gases
are
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that are
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 greenhouse gases. Second and foremost,
additionally
, reason
of
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for
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the
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change
of
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in
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climate
 and
destruction
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the destruction
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 of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer at the same time is to use
from
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of
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the
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apply
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gasoline powered
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gasoline-powered
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 vehicles.
However
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,However
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 in present,
the
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a
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 number of developed car
company
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companies
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 as soon as Tesla, Audi,
Toyota
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and Toyota
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 produce powered
electrycal
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electrical
electric
 cars.On the one hand,
majority
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the majority
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 of countries started to
prohibite
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prohibit
prohibited
utilize
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utilisation
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from
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of
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 fossil fuels.
To
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In
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 my
mind
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,mind
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 these methods will drop up to
change
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the change
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 of
climate
 and help us
for
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rescue
human
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the human
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 race. In sum
up
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, The Earth is our nest and to protect it is people's duty.
However
, all of us have to work together for
this
 purpose.
Otherwise
,because of many issues
such
 as Air pollution, contamination and so on,we will lose our world.
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