Governments give lots of supports to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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of help and support for their artists, but people
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it is a waste of money. We are trying to justify why
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to support their artist.
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know that artist
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period. For
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reason
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of benefices for them to help
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creating new songs, plays, or novels. These
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them to improve culture, arts and writing. I think that
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help is necessary to perform
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their
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, and the improvement of any advance
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by them in all related
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for their country and humanity.
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