The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.

The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.
The flow chart provided depicts
coffee
production and preparation in order to sell it on the market.
Overall
, as can be vividly seen from the diagram,
this
procedure comprises eleven distinct steps, commencing with collecting the beans and culminating in packing
coffee
. As illustrated by the chart,
firstly
, the
coffee
beans are picked by hand before drying under the sun. Afterwards, the beans are roasted and become ready for the next step. Following that, after cooling rapidly, they are ground up into small pieces. The sixth step is when these small pieces are mixed with hot water, followed by straining the mixture. In the subsequent stage, the mixture is frozen;
then
,
this
frozen liquid is ground again. By the end of the tenth step,
this
mixture has been dried in a vacuum, and its water has been evaporated.
Finally
,
coffee
is packed up into jars, and these jars are
labeled
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and ready to be sold.
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