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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows the
percentage
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 of five countries spending spend their
money
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 on drinks, housing, clothes, and
entertainment
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.
Overall
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, Turkey spends the most
percentage
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 on
food
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 and
drink
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 with
a
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apply
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36%
between
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among
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 the five countries. UK spend 37% on housing which is the highest. Germany spends 15% on clothing and 19% on
entertainment
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. As can be seen in the table. France spends
money
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 mostly on housing with a
percentage
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 of 31%, 25% on
food
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 and drinks, 13% on
entertainment
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, and only 7% on clothing. Moving to the next country, Germans spend 22% on
food
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 and
drink
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, 33% on housing, 15% on clothing, and 19% on
entertainment
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.
Also
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, In
UK
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the UK
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, 27% on
food
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 and
drink
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, 37% on housing which is the highest in these countries,
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and 11
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% on both clothing and
entertainment
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. moving to Turkey and Spain. Turkey spends 36% on
food
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 and drinks, 20% on housing, 12% on clothing, and only 10% on
entertainment
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However
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, Spanish people spend their
money
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 mostly on
food
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 and
drink
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, 18% on housing, 8% which is the least
percentage
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on
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of
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 what they spend
money
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, and 15% on
entertainment
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. .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, money, entertainment, food, drink with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion of monthly household income
  • illustrates
  • cost of living
  • prioritization
  • balanced distribution
  • cultural emphasis
  • significant portion
  • reflects lifestyle
  • economic emphasis
  • category
  • allocate
  • notable amount
  • consumption pattern
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