Pie charts shows the electricity production by fuel in France and Australia in 1980 and 2000.

Pie charts shows the electricity production by fuel in France and Australia in 1980 and 2000.
Generation
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The generation
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of
electricity
by fuel in France and Australia
are
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is
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illustrated in the given pie charts for the years 1980 and 2000. Over a period of 20 years in Australia, the production of
electricity
by coal has increased
more
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than 50 per cent.
Moreover
, the
use
of Hydro
Power
has slightly gone up but a drastic decline in the
use
of Natural Gas and Oil has been recorded for the making of
electricity
.
However
, in
France
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,France
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a massive increase in Nuclear
Power
has been observed over two decades which has surpassed the
use
of other fuels.
In addition
to the
use
of Nuclear
Power
, a rise of 5 units in oil has been shown
while
the consumption of coal for
eletricity
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electricity
batching has remained constant. Both, Hydro
Power
and Natural Gas have seen a downward trend from 1980 to 2000. In conclusion, France uses more
of
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Nuclear
power
along with
all the other natural fuels,
whereas
Australia only uses renewable energy resources for
electricity
production.
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