Nowadays, people normally stretch their working hours and get stressed then before. what are the reason for this? what employers can do to make people’s life easier?

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struggling
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time
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. We as
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growing with
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work
mentality so we
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always
think that ''the more you pain the more you gain'' and we
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for it in order to increase our
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salary
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when you
work
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time
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issue
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for yourself that you can not deal with when you get older and even money could not help.
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other
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categories
in your life will shift your
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mind
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work
.
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,
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with childhood friends,
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, new
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habit
habits
, and have a day off to get enough
time
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significant
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rate of
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and
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than
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just
work
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amount of
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leisure
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friends will help to
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