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The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002.

The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of various categories of
families
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 living in
poverty
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 in the UK in the year 2022.
Overall
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, the amount of
families
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 living in
poverty
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 is unequal. The percentage of sole
parents
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parents'
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families
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 living in
poverty
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 accounts for the
proportion
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that is
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 the highest. Meanwhile, the lowest
proportion
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 of
families
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 living in
poverty
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 is
single aged
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single-aged
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 people. It is noticeable that
,
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 the number of sole parents
families
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 and single without children account for half the
proportion
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 of all types of
families
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 living in
poverty
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 in the UK at 26% and 24% respectively.
In addition
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, the
proportion
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 of married couples with children is 15% and the whole household is 14% living in
poverty
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.
It is clear that
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 the remaining 21% of the family groups living in
poverty
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 include couples without children at 9%, Aged singles at 7% and Aged couples at 5%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, poverty, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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