Some people feel that governments should take a large portion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A large part of the population holds the view that the government should invest a large portion of people's earnings in public services, but others might not agree with
this
view. I will be discussing both views and state my opinion on
this
matter. On the one hand, a large number of people, including me, consider that high customs is an awful idea.
Firstly
, high taxes hurt the poor.
As a result
of
this
, individuals do not have enough money to spend on basic needs
such
as food or clothing.
Secondly
, the citizens living in corrupt countries might not trust the government with their money. I think the governments should cut the
spendings
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in certain areas and use them to pay for necessary public services.
For instance
, the US spends about 750 billion dollars on the military, which is fifty times more than any other country in the world. The money spent on
military
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could be
instead
spent on the population.
On the other hand
, high taxes allow the country to build
higher quality
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roads and schools. Undoubtedly, proper roads and education
has
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an important role to play in our lives.
Furthermore
, tariffs allow education to be free of charge, which allows the less well-off
acquire
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a basic education and get employed.
For example
, Norway offers these public services to the population.
Hence
, the poverty rate has declined. In conclusion,
although
high taxes do provide lots of benefits to
the
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society, I think the government should
instead
reallocate their expenses on more important things,
such
as roads, schools and helping the poor.
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