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Some people feel that governments should take a large portion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing.

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In the ongoing debate about
hight
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taxes
 , there are 2 viewpoints.Some
people
 think high
taxes
 are a bad thing.
On the other hand
 , some
people
 feel that governments should take a large proportion of
peoples
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 salaries to pay for necessary public services. Both perspectives have their merits, but finding an approach is essential to make a balance between community development .
Firstly
,those who think high
taxes
 have their own benefits,argue that governments should take a larger proportion
from
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people
’s salaries.By paying higher
taxes
 they believe it will ensure a more suitable and organised living in the city because of the public services.
Moreover
,higher payments to the government
allows
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 it to stabilise the situation in the city.
For example
, the number of homeless
people
 will significantly decrease,
furthermore
,it will provide
an
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equality in the state.
Secondly
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 there are individuals that are concerned about higher
taxes
.
This
 perspective has its place in today’s world ,
beacause
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because
 there are some disadvantages.
By increasing
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peoples
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taxes
 it will cause
a
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reduced economic growth.
People
 and companies will face higher payouts and will not have money left for investments .another disadvantage is
high
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a high
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 rate of unemployment. In conclusion, higher
taxes
 can either be a good thing for society or a bad thing for individuals but finding a balance is a crucial key
for
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 community development
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