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Some people feel that governments should take a large portion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing.

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In the ongoing debate about
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taxes
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 , there are 2 viewpoints.Some
people
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 think high
taxes
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 are a bad thing.
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 , some
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 feel that governments should take a large proportion of
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 salaries to pay for necessary public services. Both perspectives have their merits, but finding an approach is essential to make a balance between community development .
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,those who think high
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 have their own benefits,argue that governments should take a larger proportion
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people
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’s salaries.By paying higher
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 they believe it will ensure a more suitable and organised living in the city because of the public services.
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,higher payments to the government
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 it to stabilise the situation in the city.
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, the number of homeless
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 will significantly decrease,
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,it will provide
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equality in the state.
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 there are individuals that are concerned about higher
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.
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 perspective has its place in today’s world ,
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because
 there are some disadvantages.
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peoples
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taxes
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 it will cause
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reduced economic growth.
People
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 and companies will face higher payouts and will not have money left for investments .another disadvantage is
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 rate of unemployment. In conclusion, higher
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 can either be a good thing for society or a bad thing for individuals but finding a balance is a crucial key
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 community development
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