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The diagram shows how tea leaves are processed into five tea types. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows how tea leaves are processed into five tea types. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture
illustrate
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 the
production
 of five types of
tea
 from
tea
 leaves.
Overall
, the
production
 of various teas is divided into three main stages and
for
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four types of teas are followed by
the
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different additional processes.
Firstly
, the
the
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leaves cultivated in the land are plucked and
then
are
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withered in the manufacturer area. Regarding
of
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white
tea
production
, the wilting
tea
 leaves directly pass the oven dryer and white
tea
production
 is done. On the other side,steaming and rolling
is
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 needed to make green
tea
while
 ove drying is still necessary. Turning to the other types of
tea
productions
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production
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, All oolong
tea
,
large
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large-leaf
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leaf
 black
tea
, and
small
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small-leaf
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leaf
blact
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black
tea
producutin
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production
products
 are continued directly to the rolling and crushing
prosess
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process
. Slight fermentation is done before drying with
oven
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an oven
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 for oolong
tea
 making.
lastly
, the making of
large
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large-leaf
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leaf
 black
tea
 and
small
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leaf
blact
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black
tea
 pass the full fermentation process and
then
 drying
with
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in
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oven
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an oven
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.
Finally
,
the
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both products are ready.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, tea, leaf with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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