The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who attended four different attractions in Brighton.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who attended four different attractions in Brighton.
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The graph represents the number of tourists to England who visited several different attractions in Brighton from 1980 and 2010.
It is clear that
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the most interesting attraction in 1980 was
festival
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the festival
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and the least was
pier
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the pier
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.
However
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, in 2010 pier climbed sharply and the art gallery was the least popular. During the 1980s and 1995s pavilion fluctuated wildly from 25% to 49% and the trend was downward to 35% in 2010.
Also
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, visitors
in
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to
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art
gallery
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galleries
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increased rapidly from 22% to 38% from 1980 to 1985
then
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dropped to 9-8%.
According to
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the graph
percentage
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the percentage
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of tourists who visited the Brighton Festival fluctuated slightly but in general remained stable at about 27 per cent. The period between 1980 and 2000 saw a vacillation in a pier
then
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it rose significantly from 13 per cent to 23 per cent between 2000 and 2010.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • tourists
  • attractions
  • trends
  • popularity
  • seasonal variations
  • attendance figures
  • locality
  • predicting
  • data analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • decline
  • increment
  • steady
  • plummet
  • surge
  • stagnate
  • benchmark
  • correlate
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