Some people believe that studying at unversity or college is the best route to a successful career while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both view and give your opinion

It is often said that going to a place of

further

education is the best way to have a successful career,

whereas

others think that it is preferable to go

work

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immediately afterwards going educational institution. It is the opinion of

this

writer that the former choice is the best opinion.

To begin

with, in my opinion studying at

university

or college is the best way

lead

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us to a successful career. Many

people

think it is easier for most

people

to find a

job

if they are

university

graduate

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with a good degree.

In other words

,

get

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qualifications puts

people

one step ahead of others who do not and

this

can be the deciding factor in getting a

job

even

receive

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lucky opportunities in social intercourse.

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in to

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university

and the increasing number of graduates show just how significant

this

level of education is for

people

's future

work

opportunities.

Therefore

,

this

may bring out a good chance of getting promoted to higher positions

such

as managers or executives.

On the other hand

, after leaving school suddenly look for a new

job

which

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don't

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choose

study

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to study

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college or

university

. If you are not well prepared for

such

possible obstacles, you can suffer from untended consequences.

Work

after school maybe you will become self-sufficient

earn

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and earn

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money without any help

your

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parents. Maybe in social life, they get into

troubles

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trouble

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with their

work

or colleague,

they

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will disdain

before

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apply

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the public because they are

undergraduate

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undergraduates

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.

For example

,

today

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job

market is more competitive and a Bachelor’s degree or Master’s degree in your

job

enquiry can be a huge advantage compared to other applicants. Employers would prefer a person who has an adequate amount of knowledge to

work

efficiently with less training time. In conclusion, getting a good

job

requires a relevant background either in experience or education depending on the type of

work

and field. It seems to me that students with higher academic

background

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are likely to be more successful in pursuing their dream jobs.