The diagram below shows a simple system that turns dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates a method of filtering dirty
water
using a barrel
, drum
a pipes and two taps.
Overall
, the main step are
pouring the dirty Change the verb form
is
water
into the barrel
, the water
go
through the filter and the pipe to be cleaned, after that it is stored in the Change the verb form
goes
drum
.
The system consists of a barrel
and a drum
connected with
each other through a tube. The top of the Change preposition
to
barrel
is covered by a thin round lid and its bottom half is filled with 3 layers of sand, charcoal, and gravel respectively. The drum
serves as a storage container of filtered water
with a built-in tap.
The process begin
when the dirty Change the verb form
begins
water
is poured in
the Change preposition
into
the
Remove the redundancy
apply
barrel
through the first layer is sand, following
by the second layer is charcoal and Wrong verb form
followed
final
is gravel.After, the cleaned Correct article usage
the final
water
flow
through the pipe and Change the verb form
flows
stored
in the Add a missing verb
is stored
drum
until it is out of water
of the first tank.Add an article
the water
Finally
, users can getThe
diagram Correct your spelling
get the
illustrates
a method of filtering dirty Wrong verb form
illustrating
water
using a barrel
, drum
a pipes and two taps.Submitted by anhnguhongmai on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, barrel, drum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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