The diagram below shows a simple system that turns dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates a method of filtering dirty aqua using 2 tanks,
a
pipes and two taps.
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Overall
, the main step is pouring the dirty water
into the barrel, the water
go
through the filter and the pipe Change the verb form
goes
to be
cleaned, after that it is stored in the Change the verb form
is
drum
.
The system consists of a tub and a drum
connected each
other through a tube. The top of the cask is covered by a thin round lid and its bottom half is filled with 3 layers of sand, charcoal, and gravel respectively. The Change preposition
to each
drum
serves as a storage container of filtered water
with a built-in tap.
The process beginned
when the dirty Correct your spelling
begins
water
is poured in to
the barrel Join the words
into
through
the first layer is sand, Change preposition
apply
follow
by the second layer is charcoal and Change the form of the verb
followed
last
layer is gravel.After, the cleaned Change the article
the last
water
going
through the pipe and Wrong verb form
goes
stored
in the Add a missing verb
is stored
drum
until it is out of water
Add an article
the water
of
the first tank.Change preposition
in
Finally
, the user can get the water
from the tap.Submitted by anhnguhongmai on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, drum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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