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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The lines indicate three materials and their medium rate over every
month
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 in 2014. In the first review, Nickel displays the highest fluctuation with the biggest gap with others
in
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 6% and
conversely
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 the lowest point
at the end
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 at 1%. Meanwhile, the lowest point of all months happens in
month
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 six too. Copper has less change over
time
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 which is approximately the same amount at the beginning and the end with 2% and 1.5%.
However
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,
Zinc
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 has just
1
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% distance at the first and the end, but with moderate up and down. Nickle after three months has a significant fall happens to 1%, Which is close to the start point of other materials, but copper is lower and at the same
time
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,
Zinc
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 grows by 3%
in
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this
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time
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. in the fifth
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month
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 all of them have an almost steady situation in order. The biggest decrease in the middle of
time
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 is shown for Nickel until -3%,
however
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,
Zinc
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 has
2
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% drop too. copper is stable and
after
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this
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 vibration is in growth between 1 or 2 percent gap until the eleventh
month
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. Considering the distance in the sixth
month
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 the pattern of movement for both
Zinc
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 and Nick is nearly equal with the lasting gap.
Finally
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,
last
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month
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 all are closer to each other around 1% space.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words month, time, zinc with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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