Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets should have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods, while others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,
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of people believe that
manufactures
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manufacturers
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and supermarkets should have the responsibility to decrease the amount of packaging of products,
however
there
still
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some people
think
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that consumers shouldn't
purchasing
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stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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with a
lot
of packaging. In
this
essay, I will discuss
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both perspectives and
also
my opinion
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the statements. First of all, manufacturers and supermarkets should reduce packaging for their products because it is
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for the environment,
as a result
of
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to produce a
package
we need to use a
lot
of energy which
lead
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to the waste of sources and
the
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fossil fuel emissions.
For instance
,
the
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greenhouse gasses tend to enhance
due to
the manufactory which can harm the habitats of animals
such
as ice melting,
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fires.
Instead
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we can use some materials that eco - friendly
such
as paper and simplistically the designs of the packages.
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, customers should avoid consuming
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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with a
lot
of packaging because
majority
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the majority
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of the
package
is made from plastic which
need
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a long time to
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. So
as
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the same time we buy things
within
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a
lot
of
package
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packages
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, we
also
get
involve
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to destroy
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our environment which
lead
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to
unsustainable
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an unsustainable
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future.
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, some travelers tend to throw the packages to the lake or ocean which is the contributor to the water pollution. In conclusion,
both
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customers and manufacturers, supermarkets need to have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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to reduce producing and purchasing goods with a
lot
of packaging by aware people
about
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the disadvantages of
package
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the package
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and
also
use
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materials that
friendly
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are friendly
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to the environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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