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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart and table graph represent information on income from different export categories and each category’s changes in
value
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 in a particular country, between 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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, petroleum
products
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 were
on
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 the top of the league table in both years,
as well as
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 engineered goods,
however
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value
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 of textiles increased gradually by 2016.
According to
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 the bar graph, the highest income in the whole period was from
petrolium
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petroleum
products
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, making up nearly 65
billion
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 $. Engineered goods are
on
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the
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second place, considering slightly more than 60
billion
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 $, even though, in 2015, it scored about 55
billion
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 $.
Likewise
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, earnings from exporting
textile
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textiles
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 increased during the period from 25 to 30
billion
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 $.
However
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, agricultural
products
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 and gems and jewellery remained the same, considering roughly 30
billion
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 $ and 40
billion
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 $, respectively. Turning to the table graph,
petrolium
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petroleum
products
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’
value
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, which was
on
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in
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the
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apply
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first place, increased only
for
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 3%.
Although
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, engineered goods
value
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 raised
for
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 8.5% by 2016.
Similarly
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, the
value
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 of textiles went up considerably,
for
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by
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 15.24%. Agricultural
products
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 increased
only
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for
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0.81%. But gems and jewellery,
on the other hand
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, decreased
for
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 5.18%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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