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Some parents believe that extra private lessons outside school hours, where students work alone with a teacher, can help them do better at school. Others disagree. What are the advantages and disadvantages of private tuition?

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Parents are involved in their children’s educational process.
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 some parents believe that private tuition can help students
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perform better at school, others do not share
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 opinion. Each of these points of view has both advantages and disadvantages. One evident benefit to extra classes is that more efforts build stronger
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knowledge
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, if a child spends more
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 on lessons, he or she has more chances to learn and remember new materials properly. Depending on my own experience, when I devote more
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 to studying, I learn things more
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absorb
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 new information better. Another reason that additional classes would be advantageous is that a pupil would get a personalized approach. A
teacher
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, as a
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, would find a way in which a student would gain information better.
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, when I was getting ready for my economics exam and took private tuition, the
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 explained topics in the most comfortable for me way, using plenty of real-world examples.
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, there are obvious disadvantages to lessons outside school hours.
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, with additional hours of
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studying
, children would have no
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 to rest. Letting a kid’s brain
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refresh and relax is as important
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 step as constant learning. As it is written in a well-known article from Scientific American journal,
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 brain cannot acquire information efficiently without making any breaks.
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, it may result in losing interest
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 learning
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. When a pupil spends a lot of
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 studying one field, it becomes boring and exhausting.
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 happened to my brother when our mother decided to ask a
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 to study history alone with him. He could not stand learning history after having history lessons seven hours per week
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, it is important to keep in mind both
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 and cons of private tuition.
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 studying with
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teacher
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extend
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student’s
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students’
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knoweladge
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knowledge
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 way,
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 learning process would
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 lead to tiredness, losing satisfaction and
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tediousness
seriousness
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Ensure that each body paragraph focuses on a specific advantage or disadvantage of private tuition. Use topic sentences to introduce each paragraph's main point.
task response
Address both sides of the argument more clearly. Provide a stronger position and more specific examples for each side. Consider the counter-arguments and address them in your response.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized attention
  • tailor teaching methods
  • learning style
  • address specific areas of weakness
  • positive reinforcement
  • academic performance
  • flexible scheduling
  • financial strain
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • over-reliance
  • independent study skills
  • over-scheduling
  • increased stress
  • reduced leisure time
  • development and well-being
  • unjustly
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