IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The first bar chart shows the percentage of people who owned a
computer
Use synonyms
 over a 10-year period from 2002 to 2010,
while
Linking Words
 the second chart provides information about the proportion of
computer
Use synonyms
 ownership based on the educational
level
Use synonyms
 during the same period.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 throughout the period the number of citizens who had a
computer
Use synonyms
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
increased steadily. In terms of educational
level
Use synonyms
, the higher
level
Use synonyms
 of education people have, the more likely they had a
computer
Use synonyms
. Looking at the bar charts in more detail, in 2002 there was almost 60% of people
who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
had a
computer
Use synonyms
,
this
Linking Words
 number increased continuously and reached its highest number in 2010 with almost 80% of individuals owning a
computer
Use synonyms
.
According to
Linking Words
 the
level
Use synonyms
 of education, the highest proportion of
computer
Use synonyms
 ownership was among postgraduate students, with more than 90% of them having a
computer
Use synonyms
 in 2010, which increased from about 70% in 2002. Respondents who had no high school diploma made up only 40% of
computer
Use synonyms
 ownership in 2010, and 15% in 2002

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, level with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
What to do next:
Look at other essays: